Rough Cut 1

Changes made when filming

I made some small changes to the scenes and characters whilst filming. The main difference I did was the costume, I felt them being in clothes made it look as if they had been out for the evening or day meaning the male may have been following them or watching the house while they were gone helping the mise-en-scene. Another thing I changes was the characters personalities, especially the character Katie’ she had a very bold personality who came across and the ‘tough’ and ‘cocky’.

New Script

Phone is ringing; hand reaches over to pick it up

Katie – Hello

Man – Hello, is there a parent or guardian there I could possibly talk to?

Katie – No sorry they won’t be back for the rest of the week

The man just hangs up and there is a cut to three different girls looking beaten up and messy

Girl one – I was home alone

Girl two – I was home alone

Girl three – I was home alone

Cut to a dark street with a tall man walking down it towards a house, he pauses and looks over at the house staring for a while.

Cut to girls bedroom setting, Lauren and Jess sat on the bed playing with phones and painting nails not speaking waiting for Katie to return to the room after phone call.

Katie returns to room

Lauren – Who was that?

Katie – just some sales person I think

Jess – have you heard the rumours about that guy?

Lauren – the one that attacked those girls?

Katie – oh that’s just a load of shit

Lauren – I don’t think it is my mum even saw something in the news paper

Jess  - we’re probably worrying about nothing

Katie – agreed anyway I’m starving let’s get something to eat

Jess – I’ll go have a look

Jess runs down stairs with all the lights already on straight into the kitchen, looking through different cupboards she walks towards the glass doors where she sees a figure outline of a male

Jess – Lauren Lauren! There’s someone there I swear! At the doors!

Frantically running up the stairs and tripping over Emily enters the bed room again.

Katie – Laughing it’s probably that guy

Katie tries making a joke out the situation not believing what jess has said

Lauren – I’ll go have a look!

Walking down the stairs to the kitchen, she doesn’t see the male standing about a meter away from her there’s a cut to the door handle and a loud slam of the door slamming cutting to the reaction from Jess and katie