Changes made when filming

I made some small changes to the scenes and characters whilst filming. The main difference I did was the costume, I felt them being in clothes made it look as if they had been out for the evening or day meaning the male may have been following them or watching the house while they were gone helping the mise-en-scene. Another thing I changes was the characters personalities, especially the character Katie’ she had a very bold personality who came across and the ‘tough’ and ‘cocky’.

New Script

Phone is ringing; hand reaches over to pick it up

Katie – Hello

Man – Hello, is there a parent or guardian there I could possibly talk to?

Katie – No sorry they won’t be back for the rest of the week

The man just hangs up and there is a cut to three different girls looking beaten up and messy

Girl one – I was home alone

Girl two – I was home alone

Girl three – I was home alone

Cut to a dark street with a tall man walking down it towards a house, he pauses and looks over at the house staring for a while.

Cut to girls bedroom setting, Lauren and Jess sat on the bed playing with phones and painting nails not speaking waiting for Katie to return to the room after phone call.

Katie returns to room

Lauren – Who was that?

Katie – just some sales person I think

Jess – have you heard the rumours about that guy?

Lauren – the one that attacked those girls?

Katie – oh that’s just a load of shit

Lauren – I don’t think it is my mum even saw something in the news paper

Jess  - we’re probably worrying about nothing

Katie – agreed anyway I’m starving let’s get something to eat

Jess – I’ll go have a look

Jess runs down stairs with all the lights already on straight into the kitchen, looking through different cupboards she walks towards the glass doors where she sees a figure outline of a male

Jess – Lauren Lauren! There’s someone there I swear! At the doors!

Frantically running up the stairs and tripping over Emily enters the bed room again.

Katie – Laughing it’s probably that guy

Katie tries making a joke out the situation not believing what jess has said

Lauren – I’ll go have a look!

Walking down the stairs to the kitchen, she doesn’t see the male standing about a meter away from her there’s a cut to the door handle and a loud slam of the door slamming cutting to the reaction from Jess and katie

Costume

The costume will be just normal clothes as these girls are meant to be just npormal girls i dont want them to look as if there is any reason for them to have naything happen to them.

I may either have them in jeans and normal tops or Pyjamas so it shows that its night time and it will state they are having a sleepover. Something and pyjamas makes them look innocent too and more vulnerable. Also the colours in which the characters are wearing can make them look more venerable and scares such as soft pinks and baby blue.

Katie and Jess will be wearing long pyjamas that totally cover them up where as I’m going to pout Laura in a nighty, this is to make her look as if she isn’t as innocent and all this strange thing happening only happens the night she here leaving the audience questioning it.

Plot

I will produce another pitch to explain my ideas for my new idea but the main idea is sticking to the way of filming that paranormal activity do.

Characters
Katie - 16 year old school girl a young sister of Jess and friends with Laura.

 Jess - 18 year old, older sister of Katie and friends of Laura

Lauren - 17 Years old, Goes to college with Jess.

 My main ideas will be explained in my pitch but the outline of the plot would be these three teenage girls home alone and the classic they hear a nose but think nothing of it. I also want to add in a phone call so I could use an idea I saw on a film where there is a song playing in the opening credits which then runs out to be a phone call of one of the girls. I think this looks really affective and draws in the viewer straight away. I’ll use a song I believe will be relevant to the genre of my movie or I might do the complete opposite and use a song/ringtone that totally contradicts the film giving the viewer’s something to think about This phone call will then set up the film and give me something to work around.

CHANGE OF IDEAS

Over my research of this film opening I started to sway more towards the idea of a horror, I found some films that gave me many ideas and I felt I would have a better overall outcome sticking to the genre of horror/thriller. A movie that greatly influenced my idea of change was paranormal activity and woman in black. The idea of the main filming of it being held by a character drew me in as it was different and unlike any other films I saw.

Film Posters

The Script Draft 1

FADE IN:

 

INT. PLAIN ROOM – DAY  

 

Young 6 year old girl is sat on a stool looking straight into the camera dressed in a fancy dress costume smiling.

CHLOE AGE 6

When I’m older I want to be a princess or a fairy or a (pause) pony

 

Scene changes with large camera flash to 10 year old blonde girl sat in the same place dressed in a Taylor swift top and messy hair .

CHLOE AGE 10

When I’m older I’m going to be a pop star like Taylor swift and I’m going to marry Taylor too

She smiles into the camera innocently. The scene changes again with a large camera flash to a teenage school girl blonde again covered in orange make up sat in the same place.

CHLOE AGED 15

I’m going to be a model, well I want to be a model, I will be one day just like those ones you see in vogue

Camera flashes to a girl in the ages of her 20s on a photo shoot. A male photographer fairy young is on set of a photo shoot with Chloe having images taken

 

RICHARD

Yes, beautiful, stand up a little straighter, now bend your knees, no actually I’ve change my mind, stand to the side oh wait you’re having a chubby day again.

Close up on Chloe’s face, she’s looking upset then another camera flash to Chloe sat in that same seat, applying makeup while the voice over plays starting with none and ending with a fully applied face.

CHLOES VOICEW OVER

I’m all I ever wanted to be, I’m famous, I’m a model, I’m like a pop star, I wear the pretty dresses and I’m on the cover to magazines. If only they knew what I go through to get here, the pain, the abuse, the (pause) illness.